First sorry for the lateness. This retelling only appeared on my site now. I had been on the site a few days ago and it wasn't there.
Thank you for your good work. You said quite a bit and I could understand you had payed attention to your reader. However sometimes I couldn't understand what you were saying as there were a few key words that were not clear in the way you said them and so it wasn't possible for me to correct it.
Please try to be clear in your pronunciation. If you don't know how to say something, then please listen to its pronunciation in an audio dictionary, because then you will be better understood when you are speaking, OK?
'... When she went to the Dr. he checked her blood sugar, it was really high.'